Cohesiveness and message clarity in essay structure

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Option 1: Envision yourself near the end of a fulfilling, lifelong career and you just published your autobiography.

Title of Autobiography: Seeing Differently: The Life and Times of (YOUR NAME)

For the vast majority of us, sight is something we take for granted. The sky is blue, and we do not need to know the physics of light particles to appreciate that because every day we look up and gaze at its deep cerulean grandeur. Our eyes, the lenses of our soul, get lost in the infinite wonder of sky and the motion of the clouds. In so doing, we have failed to remember that for millions of people worldwide, darkness is the norm. Yet now, people who are born, or who became blind later, can envelop themselves in the glory of the blue sky. We can all walk through the Louvre together, gazing upon the mysterious visage of the Mona Lisa. However, there is much more that we as biomedical engineers need to do to ensure that Optics Wonder Lenses have a broader reach, and are not bound by the restrictions that socio-economic class place on many of those who need our products.

As the creator and developer of Optics Wonder Lenses (OWL), I have had the opportunity to meet with the best leaders in the biomedical engineering field from around the world. We are a dedicated bunch. Our life's work is often spent poring over laboratory results and reports, and yet the real life's work of a biomedical engineer is in practice and application. Our painstaking research is meaningless without a way to share the wonders of discovery and technology with the world. It is time that financial barriers to healthcare be broken down worldwide, so that all human beings have equal access to medical services.

In compiling my autobiographic memoirs, I reflect back to two times I made a big leap. The first was the time I left my secure corporate position to pursue my dream of biomedical engineering. The second was the time I was a junior at the University of Chicago, now majoring in biomedical engineering. Although I enjoyed my time at the University of Chicago, I could see the boundaries and limitations of my education and those fences made me uncomfortable. I am a dreamer, someone who likes to look at the sky and perceive the endless potential of the universe. Thus, I chose a more challenging academic career at Northeastern University. The step was a huge one. I instantly felt the pressure to set goals and achieve them, for now I had something to prove. I was selected as one of a chosen few to maximize my potential as a budding biomedical engineer. I needed to show my peers and mentors what I was made of, and what I intended to do with my degree.

Now, of course, I can communicate my achievements in this book. But when I was still an undergraduate, I struggled to find a concrete way to develop my talents and skills. My work with Pi Mu Epsilon Mathematics Honor Society and the Biomedical Engineering Society meant that I surrounded myself with inspiring people. It was through meeting people at Northeastern that the spark of light shone in my own eyes: I was going to help the blind to see.