Narrative story concepts and structures

Narrative

The Fairy Tale would have been jealous of her, if she wasn't my best friend. We all were all jealous of the two of them in high school. They were perfect teenage lovers, like Romeo and Juliet minus the heartbreak. Even when they got married right out of high school and everyone said it was too soon "they are too young," they seemed to make it work. Even when she got pregnant so soon, they scrimped and saved and got by. The two little girls were never wanting.

See what I'd brought you," Teddy would say when he came home on Friday nights, his hands filled with fruit and chocolate purchased on the way home.

A called the girls my nieces when I came to visit. The eldest girl had light hazel eyes piercingly resembling the actress, Vanessa Williams. Her daddy always joked that we was already jotting down the rules of "no dating unless I'm in the back seat with y'all, and no losers at my door," for both of the girls. The youngest girl was still an infant, but she had such old eyes, eerily resembling her older sister's. "Going to get me a Rottweiler," Teddy said, "to fend off prey." Danger, he said, could lurk even in the most tender of male hearts.

I was visiting their home, on one of those Friday nights of Teddy's treats. I had suffered a typical hectic Friday at work, so I was grateful for the relative peace and calm of preparing dinner for my best friend and Teddy. I knew my friend was working late. She'd be home soon. As I idly nibbled as I sliced and diced, the girls would eat nothing, because they were waiting for daddy, waiting for daddy and his treats.

A made a plate to go from my fixings. I was just on my way out. My best friend was a little bit late, but she'd be home soon. I heard someone knocking on the door. Why knocking? Why didn't she just come in and use her key? Oh, it must Teddy. He loved playing tricks on me. I braced myself for one of Teddy's tricks.

A opened the door, but it wasn't Teddy.

It was a stranger with news, news that would change our lives forever.

A left the children in good hands. Thank goodness I still had enough of my mind left to leave the girls with the neighbors' next door, they were good people.

A found my friend only blocks away. She was standing on the ground holding her husband in her arms and crying out for God's help. Her once white dress drenched in red blood stains.

As the ambulance arrived they immediately begin working on Teddy. My girl friend was crying profusely and demanding to ride with the ambulance. I grabbed hold of her and had one of eyewitnesses, whom I knew from the neighborhood as a friend, drive us both to the hospital.

It felt like days as we waited for news. I guess it must have been hours. I don't know. I remember that I called to check on the children.

Sorry, we did all we could," said the doctor.

A did not have time to register the shock because my girlfriend collapsed and fell on the floor. The doctors quickly went to her aid, and after coming through, they gave her a sedative.

Before coming home, at his usual store, Teddy had stopped to buy peaches and Hershey's Kisses for the girls. He was robbed and killed for twenty dollars.