There is no empirical test being proposed for the paper. The a priori conclusion of the paper, in the absence of research, begs serious questions about the validity of this research. If you think you already know the answer, why ask the question?
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In terms of style, the proposal sounds disjointed, and the giant paragraphs do not help. Ideas are somewhat developed, however. There are some minor grammar/spelling errors, such as capitalizing 'gold standard' and 'fiat money.' Slang phrases like "blown away" should be avoided. Avoid first person if possible. Citations need to be improved dramatically, using proper APA style. The lack of proofreading is apparent. The style needs to be tighter as well, to improve professionalism. Stick to the facts.
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There are not nearly enough citations in the body of the work. Use APA style in the reference page for consistency.
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The report thus far does not demonstrate critical and unbiased thinking. The conclusions already exist before the research has been conducted, which creates bias. That...
The conclusions should be drawn directly from the research and the research needs to be thorough, unbiased, and focused. Better sources will help here -- there are credible views on both sides of this argument. My advice is to find them and use them.
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What I would offer is that right now this is not a proper research paper. It is a persuasive essay, and unfortunately one that really only appeals to pathos, that people should be outraged. Even a rhetorical piece about moral rightness needs logos and ethos, and right now the sources aren't credible and the arguments are not sophisticated enough. If this is to be an unbiased research paper, stick to something that can be empirically tested, not a question of morality and nothing involving speculating. You can test something like "Americans lack basic knowledge about the Federal Reserve" and then ask a number of people questions to test that knowledge. Then you have something that can be empirically tested and can be produced without bias.
