This could be strengthened by exploring the issue of whether or not governmental guidelines were established on firm science and not simply using anecdotal evidence of perceived safety and a low risk of getting caught as reasons to pursue this course of action.
Format/Organization
The format very clearly and directly follows the guidelines given, and is quite clear in its argument because of this. Each section and each paragraph develops its own focused idea, while at the same time each of these individual ideas serve the central ideas and arguments of the paper quite well and logically flow, building information and ideas in a logical manner. No irrelevant information is included, though again certain issues are ignored.
Grammar
There are very few grammar errors in this paper (one unnecessary comma use and one improper sentence construction were noted), and none were recurring nor issues of proofreading or editing, exactly. The style of the writing was very clear and straightforward, without attempts to sound fancy or flowery and yet with enough variety in sentence structure to maintain the...
One particularly effective sentence is, "At a time when the economy is in a recession and companies are looking to reduce spending, it is risky to install an entirely new (and relatively expensive) welding line." It simply and concisely gives the author's argument and their rationale for that argument, without any wasted words and without complication. A sentence that needs work, on the other hand, is, "Having the potential to be far more costly is AWC's factory concerns." This sentence could be more simply stated, "AWC's factory concerns have the potential to be far more costly." The exact same meaning is given in a much more straightforward and direct fashion.
Case Analysis
From the description of the case given, I agree that the company should install a new manufacturing line. I disagree when it comes to the environmental issues, however. I believe the company should pursue alternative means of venting and scrubbing the toxic gases produced, as meeting ethical and legal requirements should be a paramount concern for the business.
