Intergenerational program pairing troubled teens with nursing home seniors

¶ … program whereby troubled teens can help themselves by helping seniors. In addition to the background information I provided in the main body of the paper, I also conducted an interview. The interview section needed a lot of work in terms of better grammar and organization. I also had some grammar errors that needed to be corrected before the proposal was finalized. I also would like to combine the two main background sections about background and the interview, so that the entire project proposal flows and is easy and pleasant to read. So far, my paper contains the following sections:

Outline of idea

Pitch

Interview

Consultation with Secondary Sources

I would like to rearrange my paper so that the interview and consultation of secondary sources are integrated into the body of the paper. I would then re-write my introduction and conclusion to reflect these changes and the new content I am including. Ideally I will also include the transcript of the primary source (interview) as an appendix. A new introduction will provide an abstract, or overview, of what the project includes. Hopefully, it will be exciting enough to draw in the reader. The new conclusion will briefly summarize the project and allow me to end on a positive note. The revised introduction and conclusion are as follows:

Conclusion

A big idea must start somewhere. My big idea started as it should, from the beginning with background information in scholarly literature. We have seen that this background information has shown that programs that pair troubled teens with seniors in nursing homes have a beneficial effect on both populations. The secondary research conducted for this project proposal corroborates what my primary resource, a school principal with an expert in adolescent behavior, revealed to me in an interview. The combination of both primary and secondary research shows how and why my big idea will work. Two populations in the community will benefit, and I look forward to seeing how the changes will be implemented. Soon, my big idea will have evolved from a dream into a reality.