Creative revisions of "Rat Race Payday" through linguistic transformation techniques

NOriginal Poem

Rat Race

Payday, the sincerest of days when everything appears worthwhile until your card has been rejected day and one must ask the toad for more green because unlike love it is what makes the world go around until

Payday, the sincerest of days

Rat Race

Payday, the sin-cerest of days when everything appears worthwhile until… your card has been rejected day, and one must ask the toad for more green because unlike love it is what makes the world go around until

Rat Race

Payday, the sincerest of days when everything appears worthwhile until your card has been rejected day and one must ask the toad for more green because unlike love it is what makes the world go around until

Payday, the sincerest of days

N + 7 Poem

Ratbag Racemose

Payment the sincerest of daydreams when evidence appears worthwhile until your cardiac has been rejected daydream and one fold must ask the toady for more greenbelt because unlike love child it is what makes the worldly go around until

Payment the sincerest of daydreams

After reading the original poem the n + 7 poem is comical. I especially liked the transition of the first line. In some ways I found I liked the second version better, sometimes payment is a daydream. One can only wish.

Revision Process

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