¶ … sufficient evidence for its hypothesis or claim?
The paper is clear int hat it provides us with Introduction, body, and conclusion. The theme is simple too: health care providers (the paper tells us) need to respect, acknowledge, and understand the challenges that the 3 religions -- Judaism, Islam, and Shintoism -- can provide to th health care system. The health system needs to know how to satisfy adherents of these religions in order to optimize their medical care.
The paper then goes through a brief description of each religion (in Judaism's case, of Orthodox Jews) particularly as touches on their medical care and cursorily describes how medical practitioners can meet these needs. There are many more points that can be mentioned, particularly in the case of Orthodox Judaism where the profession may be riddled with many more challenges, such as kosher (and food regulation exist with Islam too). In the case of both religions, too, are gender laws (such as touching opposite sex, shaking hands of opposite sex etc.). The essay, however, may be too limited to go into further...
Orthodox Judaism, for instance, is far more complex than delineated here with Hasidim, Modern orthodox, various shades and the large spectrum each keeping o nuanced prescriptions that differ form one another. This, too, however is beyond the scope of the essay, and the author attempted to limit herself to generic description.
On the whole, given the broadness of the topic, the author did well in her treatment of the topic - sufficiently -- although not adequately - explaining her claim. Her theme, however, may have been too ambiguous for such a limited format.
b) Does the flow of the paper and sentence structure make sense?
There were incomplete sentences such as this in the Introduction:
The customs of praying, meditation, and spiritual guidance may differ from health care providers and must be taken into consideration when providing care for patients with different religious philosophies. Since healing hospital's…
